Creating a dominant impression means setting the mood or atmosphere in your writing, and we do this by using certain words and sensory details that evoke the feelings we are attempting to capture. Rather than writing, I was astonished…, I can write a description that recreates the feeling of astonishment.
I awakened feeling the weight of the world on my shoulders. Bills were piling up, but no more than the laundry, which seemed to be everywhere. How had I even acquired so many laundry baskets? I had to chase the dog around the living room with her leash to get it on her. She didn’t want to go outside because it was raining, and she hates the rain. It wasn’t raining hard, but it was steady. The drops felt cold on my skin, a refreshing contrast to the heat outside. And I could smell it, damp and grassy smelling. Summer rain. I continued to think about my worries and could feel them bearing down on me, weighing me down. And it seemed that with every step and every worry, the rain fell harder, still cold, still refreshing, as though the universe was trying to wash away the worry. It started to rain so hard, I had to lower my head to keep it from getting in my eyes, and I knew the dog was miserable, so I headed back towards the house. Ahead, on the ground, I could see a glow of light about 10 feet in front of me. I lifted my head and saw, what seemed to be two yellow butterflies dancing around each other, in what appeared to be a clearing in the rain. Their gossamer wings seemed to glow, as if edged with glitter. And, it was as it they were on stage, a spotlight on them. Dancing. Even the dog stopped to watch this waltz. And my troubles, they lifted just a bit.
See, hear, taste, feel, smell your memory. Use your senses and have fun with words. There are no teachers, conventions, or rules in your notebook.
(c) 2017 WRITE. by Trina O'Gorman